Hi everybody, this is my first official post. I know, I said it would be Saturday, and it’s technically Friday (unless you live in Fiji, in which case I’m doing it on the right day). Anyway, I want to talk about storytelling.

Many people have asked me “Renegade, why do you write your stories?” (Actually, that’s a lie: nobody’s ever asked me that, and now they don’t have to.)

It’s all about having a story to tell. I started because I had a story in my head which I wanted to share. It’s a way of showing my creativity, something all creative people need. SOme choose textiles, some choose drawing, some just can’t be bothered. But I wanted to express it through words.

So I wrote a couple of chapters, just as a laugh. I didn’t expect that 6 years later, I would still be writing it and still be loving it.

Fanfiction writing has a sometimes unsavoury reputation for being “a load of fangirls writing their sexual fantasies”. No, really, that is an actual quote from an actual person, who for many reasons (not least their embarrassment) will remain anon.

Fanfiction writing is a way of embracing the culture of a show. We’ve all been there, watching a program we love, and something happens which we didn’t agree with. They killed off a character we liked. Or maybe they left a cliffhanger and we think we know how it should be written next.

That is what fanfiction writing is. It isn’t telling the writers that we think we know better than them, or they’re doing a terrible job. Quite the opposite in fact: I believe that it is a subconscious message to the creators and writers, saying “well done, we are invested”. Because we are investing.

Even if it isn’t a financial investment, we are investing ourselves. Our thoughts, our feelings, our time, that is our investment. And they are more valuable than any coin or note. Because we can’t get that time back. By investing it in this universe, we are creating our own little universe where we decide what happens. And sometimes, it’s just nicer than being in our real universe.

And to celebrate storytelling, I will share with you the first chapter I ever wrote. I will share the first 1000words as a preview, and then if you want to read on, I will provide the link. This chapter has since been rewritten and re-mastered several times, but the genesis premise remains the same. This is What Makes an Army Chapter 1: Evil Born

Chapter One- Evil Born

Point of View- Phil

The year: 2014

The date: 1st February

The location: Greenock College, Greenock, Scotland

The temperature: Cold (isn’t it always in Scotland)?

It was the usual temperature in Scotland (probably minus figures). My plan was about to commence.

Now I must explain who I am for you. I’m Phil Robinson. I’m at this college on business. But I’m not a school inspector. Or a taxi driver. Or a parent (yet). No- I’m a hypnotist. Not trained, not approved, self taught, hypnotist… probably. I’ve not actually tried it yet, but I found a course online teaching me. Only cost £100. Anyway…

The reason I’m here is because I have a target. She doesn’t study here, but she’s visiting here. So my target is the person she’s visiting- her pen pal. Then, running as fast as her legs would go, she arrived. Her name? Jodi ‘Scout’ Allen. I followed her in, then tapped her on the shoulder.

Phil: ‘Can you tell me where Hannah Cummings is?’

Jodi: ‘Dunno- I’m meeting her for the first time today. Who are you anyway?’

Phil: ‘I’m an old friend of hers. My name’s Phil Robinson. Can I have a word a moment?’

Jodi: ‘Sure. I’m Jodi Allen by the way.’

Phil: ‘Thanks.’ I then took her to one side, and immediately handcuffed her to a rail.

Jodi: ‘What are you doing?’

Phil: ‘Short or long answer required?’

Jodi: ‘Short.’

Phil: ‘Hypnotising you.’

Jodi: ‘Ok, rewind, why?’

Phil: ‘You want the long answer now? Geez- teenagers these days, can never make their minds up. Fine- I want Hannah under my control. And I need someone to help me do it. So that’s where you come in- I heard from a friend of mine that you are spending time with Hannah. So you can get Hannah for me, and I get 2 slaves instead of 1. Explanation enough? Or you want me to write it down for you?’

Jodi: ‘Please- I’ll do that for you, just let me go, ok?’

Phil: ‘Fine- you have 48 hours. You will wear this camera tie so I know exactly what’s going on. If you even try to tell her, or you don’t do it, or try to run away, the tie will tell me and a siren will start wailing, knocking you out.’

Jodi: ‘Fine- just untie me you freak.’ I then untied her.

Phil: ‘Clock’s ticking.’

Jodi: ‘I know.’ Jodi then left, and I kept an eye on her and Hannah. After the first 24 hours, nothing seemed to be happening. So as Jodi left for the day, I took her to one side. ’24 hours left- I’ll get there.’

Phil: ‘I’ve decided to extend the time limit.’

Jodi: ‘Really?’

Phil: ‘Yes- you’ll have forever to repay me.’ I then handcuffed her to the post again. ‘This time it’s not a threat.’

Jodi: ‘I don’t have to look.’

Phil: ‘Once it’s started, you won’t be able to look away. Now watch the pretty coin of gold, and you will do as you are told. You will obey only me.’ Jodi couldn’t look away, no matter how much she tried to resist. ‘Good girl- you’re there now. Now keep your focus. When I click my fingers, you will be in a hypnotic trance, unable to resist my word.’ I then clicked my fingers and it worked- she was in an entranced state.

‘Now Jodi, listen to my words, read them well. I will shortly click my fingers for a second time. You will then awaken. But your heart will be tainted and dark- you will no longer be bound to the laws of this world. You will be deep under my spell, determined to follow my every word. You are stronger than you would think, but your strength along with your heart and mind are now mine.’ I then clicked my fingers a second time, and Jodi awakened, deep under my spell.

‘Jodi, I will drive you home, and you will pack your bags, before leaving. You will then get back in my car, and you will move in to our base of operations. You refer to me now as your master.’

Jodi: ‘I will obey master.’

Phil: ‘Good girl Jodi. Let’s go.’ Jodi then got in my car, and we left for her house. When we got there, I briefed her again. ‘Jodi, you will go and pack all of your belongings into suitcases. If anybody asks, you’re moving, you tell them nothing else. Once everything is packed up, you come with me to the base.’

Jodi: ‘Yes master.’ Jodi then got out of the car, and walked to the front door at a quick and determined pace. When the door was opened for her, she walked straight through the woman at the door, and walked straight upstairs. She then re-emerged about 5 minutes later, the woman shouting at her. She bunged the two suitcases into the back of the car, and then got back into the car, before leaving with me.

We drove south, for nearly 7 hours. When we got there, I opened the door, and she walked straight in, surprising Sean.

Sean: ‘Yo Phil, that’s not Hannah. What’s going on?’

Phil: ‘Slight hitch in the plan- this is the one I hired to get her. Didn’t co-operate.’

Sean: ‘Plan still on?’

Phil: ‘Advance the plan as agreed.’

Sean: ‘Gotcha man. What about the girl?’

Phil: ‘I’ll deal with her for now. Her name’s Jodi. Actually, could you set up the Cyber lab?’

Sean: ‘Sure.’ Sean then went up the stairs to set up the Cyber lab. A few minutes later, he called from upstairs. ‘All set up.’

Phil: ‘Jodi, come with me.’ Jodi then followed me up the stairs to the Cyber lab, where I took her hair down, and lay her down on a bed. ‘Now relax Jodi- the conversion will shortly take place. When you are awakened, you will remember little, just what you need.’ The bed that Jodi was on was then wheeled under the machine, which was long, cylindrical, and very, very hot. Me and Sean followed that up by going down, where we met up with another friend- Mollie.

Mollie: ‘So you’ve got the messenger.’

Phil: ‘Yeah- I do.’

Mollie: ‘Bet when you have Hannah, she’ll fall in love with you.’

Phil: ‘She won’t.’ We were then interrupted by a muffled screech from upstairs. ‘That’ll be the mind-wiping taking effect. Can’t have everything in life- mind-wiping is painful.’

If you want to read the rest of this inaugural chapter, you can find it here: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/9036873/1/What-Makes-An-Army

Thank you for reading, enjoy the chapter. On my next post, I will deliver my first game review, and it’s a beauty: How to Train Your Dragon 2 for Xbox 360. Until next time my fellow Renegades, All for the Renegades!

 

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